by Kinkychic
Many thanks to JS contributor BlueJean for editing this story.
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From late July and right through August, I regularly went picking blackberries for my mother. She made the most gorgeous pies and crumbles with them, along with some added apples, of course. She also made pretty good wine, just as long as I’d picked enough. Most years, I picked anything up to fifty or sixty pounds. We had an extra freezer in the garage just for all the wild fruits I collected. Damsons, elderberries, and sloes added to the selection.
A couple of years back the crop hadn’t been as good as it usually was, so hoping to find a better area, I began to search further afield.
Boudica Way is a thirty-mile-long bridal way dating from the Roman occupation of Britain. A short walk from our house, it trailed through a stretch of woodland where I’d never ventured before. I decided to try my luck there, and very quickly found good clumps of brambles covered with large ripe berries. Even better, nobody else seemed to be picking along here.
I came to a point where a track ran off to the left, and being naturally inquisitive, wondered where it might lead. It wasn’t very far before my way was barred by a high metal gate. A notice hung in the centre: Private Property No Trespassing. Peering through the bars, I caught a glimmer of sun reflecting off water. There must be a lake down there, I thought. The area had many old and abandoned gravel quarries, and I guessed this might be one. The sign was probably only there for safety reasons.
My curiosity got the better of me. On either side of the gate was just dense shrub amongst the trees, and after a quick look and a bit of poking about, I soon found a way around.
The track leading away from the gate was fairly steep heading down, but very soon I saw it did indeed lead to a lake. My jaw dropped when I came through the trees and out into the open. Never had I seen such a stunningly beautiful vista. Thick, lush grass carpeted the landscape, dotted with a smattering of beautiful wild flowers in various colours. The lake in the centre was huge – maybe the equivalent of ten soccer pitches – and framed behind by high excavated cliffs. There were two reed and shrub covered islands towards the middle.
There didn’t seem to be anyone else around. Did I dare go down and take a look? Yes! So what if I was caught? What could they do to a thirteen-year-old?
I walked to the edge of the lake and found a small jetty with a little rowing boat tied to it. Fish swam about in the crystal clear water, and everywhere I looked there were dozens of ducks, as well as a large family of swans.
Past the lake, I followed the vague outline of a path that ran back towards the treeline, and a short ways in I was surprised to discover a flight of wooden steps that seemingly disappeared up into the trees.
Then I saw the treehouse hidden amongst the higher branches.
Not just any old treehouse, though – this one had a fenced ramp running from the steps that led up to a spacious veranda. The door and windows were all glazed and there were even wooden tiles on the roof.
I stood there peering up, amazed. What was this place? It was surely too big and elaborate to be a child’s treehouse. Did someone live here? Was this some rich family’s summer retreat? The whole place was a hidden paradise.
I resisted the urge to climb up and take a closer look – if it was someone’s home I didn’t want to get in trouble for trespassing.
I wandered off around the other side of the lake instead, and bingo! There on the edge of the trees were plenty of blackberry bushes bearing the biggest berries I’d ever seen. I’d hit the jackpot!
In no time at all I had two buckets so full I was struggling to carry them. It didn’t occur to me until then that I would have to carry the heavy load all the way home, which was at least a couple miles away. Eventually, I did manage it, but my shoulders were awfully sore the next day.
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I began to visit the island on the lake every few days, and never did I see another soul on those occasions, except the ducks and the swans and the fish. Oh, and the wasps that buzzed around any over-ripe berries in my buckets, but they didn’t bother me much.
It was one particularly hot day out on the lake when I decided to sit and soak in the beauty of my surroundings for a while. I had already picked my berries for the day, so I went and hid my buckets in the shade of a tree, then walked back to where the steps led up to the treehouse. I sat there at the bottom where it was nice and cool, and looked out onto the clear water. An ideal spot to just chill out for a bit.
I was startled awake sometime later by a voice and realised I must have dozed off.
“What are you doing here? Didn’t you see the sign? It’s private property, you know. It says so on the gate.”
For a moment, I just stared at the girl who had spoken, rubbing my eyes sleepily and trying to gather my thoughts.
“I didn’t come through the gate,” I told her, then pointed in another direction. “I came in over there.” I no longer entered by the trackway. I’d found a shorter, though steeper route through the trees. I knew about the sign, of course, but I wasn’t going to tell her that. “I’m really sorry. I didn’t know it was private, honestly.”
We sort of stared at each other for a moment, neither of us quite sure what to say next. She was pretty, maybe a year or so older than me, I guessed. What really got me though, were her denim shorts – well, the lack of them, really. They were obviously a size or more too small for her. They had a ragged cut hem, and from where I was sitting I could just see the pink edge of her panties. The front of the shorts were tight and left almost nothing to the imagination. Her legs – oh wow, her legs! – were about half a mile long and utterly gorgeous.
“It’s rude to stare, you know,” she said with the hint of a smile on her lips. “Especially where you’re staring.”
I started to get up. “I’m sorry, I didn’t mean any harm. Er… by being here, I mean.”
“It’s okay. You can stay, I suppose.” She plonked herself down next to me on the step. “You don’t seem to be the vandal type. So how did you find this place?”
I explained to her that I came here sometimes to pick a few berries, and that I liked to sit and watch the ducks. “I’m sorry if I’ve done wrong… but I guess I already said that, didn’t I?”
“Don’t worry about it. I don’t mind, but it’s just as well it was me that found you and not my father. He can be very harsh with trespassers, because of the damage they’ve caused in the past.”
Once again I started to say I was sorry, but she interrupted. “Stop apologising – I’ve said it’s okay. What’s your name, anyway?”
I saw her smile and felt myself relax a bit. “I’m called Bee. It’s not my real name, though.”
She giggled. “How lovely! But are you a nice bee or a stingy bee?”
I’d heard all the jokes before, of course, and they usually bored me, but I didn’t seem to mind it from her. I returned her smile. “Me? I’m a friendly bee. I never sting.”
Then she did something strange – well, strange for two teenagers, I suppose – held out her palm for a handshake. “I’m Davina. It’s nice to meet you, Bee – even if you are a trespasser.”
I instantly fell in love with the sound of her tinkling laughter. Not only did it have a musical quality, but it was also incredibly infectious. I couldn’t help but join in.
She told me all about the lake, how it was a long-abandoned gravel quarry. Her father had bought it almost twenty years ago and landscaped the whole place. She took me to a reedy corner and showed me where the ducks nested. Several had eggs in them. The swans nested on the other island, she told me.
I glanced at my watch and realised with some alarm how much time had flown by. “Davina, I really have to go. My mother will be fretting.”
She gave me a little pout of disappointment. “Oh. Perhaps you could come again tomorrow? Maybe around twelve o’clock?”
I heard the hope in her voice. She seemed to really want me to come back. “I’d love to,” I told her. “I can bring some sandwiches and stuff, if you like.”
She clapped her hands together. “Yes! And I’ll bring some drinks.” A flicker of doubt crossed her face and she reached out to touch my hand. “Promise you’ll come, Bee?”
“Don’t worry, I’ll be here.”
I went to find my buckets. When I turned back, Davina was still there on the steps of the treehouse. She raised a hand to wave and then I made my way into the trees.
***
It was the school holidays, so Davina and I met every day at the same time. In only a few days, we became firm friends, and I was no longer a trespasser but a bonafide guest.
On every visit she wore the same style shorts as she had on our first meeting, and I was finding it very hard not to stare at her crotch when she sat on the grass in front of me. I’d known for over a year that I was only into girls, but Davina never gave any hint that she might be open to the same way of thinking. I was scared to spoil our friendship, so I resolved to behave myself. I just loved her company, and that would have to do.
It had been a month since our first meeting when Davina asked me, “Bee, would you like to see the island? Not the one with the swans – they can get a bit spiky when you go near their nests – but we can go to the other one.”
I told her I’d like to, and soon we’d collected a pair of oars from the boat shed and were making our way down to the little jetty.
“Have you ever rowed a boat before?” Davina asked me.
I hadn’t, and didn’t want to make a fool of myself in front of my new friend. “No. I’d prefer to just watch, if you can manage on your own. Maybe I can have a go coming back.”
I soon discovered that sitting in front of a girl wearing small, tight shorts while she rows a boat is quite the eye-opener. The gentle undulation of Davina’s pussy lips through the thin material as she went back and forth with the oars was making me tingle quite badly between my legs. By the time we reached the island I didn’t know what to do with myself.
“You’d best take your shoes off,” Davina said as the boat came to a stop. “We’re going to get wet feet here.”
Carefully we climbed ashore, and took the rope with us to tie the boat up safely. Everywhere seemed squidgy and wet underfoot until I followed her to the centre of the island where the ground was firmer.
Now we were in our own little sanctuary, the surrounding bushes hiding us completely from the outside world. We lay down in the soft, dry grass, the sound of ducks and other birds creating a sweet symphony in this slice of paradise.
Davina was still a little out of breath from her rowing, and I found myself staring again, this time at the rise and fall of her breasts, which were a fair bit larger than mine.
She suddenly got to her feet and my eyes followed her as she plucked a wildflower from the ground, then sat back down, closer to me now. I was surprised when she reached out and tucked it into my hair. “There – a beautiful flower for a beautiful girl.”
I felt the heat of a blush on my face. She laughed her wonderful laugh. “Bee, don’t say you’ve gone shy on me. I’ve noticed you don’t seem shy when I catch you looking.”
I startled at her words, then felt even more warmth infuse my cheeks.
“Oh yes, I’ve seen how you look at me,” Davina continued. “At first, I was a bit cross with you. I thought about ending our friendship, you know. After a while though, I realised that I was waiting for you to look, and then wanting you to look. Then today, in the boat, I saw you getting all hot, and I really liked what I was doing to you.” She blew out a breath of air. “There. I’ve said it.”
She stretched a knee back towards her head in a kind of yoga move, and when I turned to look at her – still trying to take in her words – her thigh was a few inches from my face.
If I still had any reservations, they now evaporated. I craned my neck slightly until my lips made contact with her knee. I let them linger there while my eyes locked on hers. For a long moment she lay there, simply looking. Then her fingers touched my cheek. “Bee…”
I sat up and leaned towards her. I saw both the wanting and the uncertainty in her eyes. “Davina, I’m going to kiss you. Please let me, don’t be scared.” Then my lips came to hers, gentle and loving.
Very slowly, she accepted my kiss. I felt her tremble beneath me, then she was kissing me back. I applied a little more pressure and she in turn pressed harder into me. My hand trailed to the nape of her neck, pulling her tighter against me. When the kiss became more urgent, I realised how much longing I’d built up for this beautiful girl. I hadn’t expected it to come to anything, but now, finally, she was in my arms.
But I felt her suddenly tense and pull away. I let her go, and she sat staring at the ground.
“Bee… I can’t. I’m too nervous. I think we should go.”
I put my arm back around her shoulder and gave it a soft squeeze. “I’m sorry, I went too fast. I know you’re new to this, but I love you. I don’t want us to leave things like this.”
Her eyes met mine. “You love me? You really love me? But we’re both…” Her voice trailed off.
“Girls? So? And yes – I really do love you.”
Some of the tension seemed to drain out of her. “I guess you’ve done this before, but I haven’t. I know I started it – I egged you on, and I shouldn’t have. I’m sorry.”
I gently touched her arm. “Let’s just lay here a while. We can still be friends.”
She settled back into the grass alongside me, her shoulder just barely brushing against mine. We lay there like that for what seemed an age, not a word spoken by either of us.
Then I felt her fingers slowly hook into my own. I squeezed gently, mindful not to scare her again.
Still we said nothing, until eventually I heard her whisper, “You can kiss me again if you want. I don’t mind.”
I propped myself up on an elbow and leaned into her. “Are you sure? You can tell me to stop if you don’t like it, I won’t be upset.”
Davina smiled at me and murmured, “Kiss me, then.”
“I will. I want to so much.”
My finger traced her lips, back and then forth. She pursed them, kissing my fingertip tentatively. “Go slowly with me, please.”
I brought my lips softly to hers in the faintest hint of a kiss. “Close your eyes,” I whispered, then kissed her eyelids with another gentle caress, before peppering more upon her nose and across her cheeks.
Turning on my side, I gently pulled her towards me. We gazed into each other’s eyes. “I love you, Davina.” When I touched my lips to hers once again, she returned the kiss.
I brushed my fingers across her chin, lightly teasing the soft skin there, then trailing round to explore her ears and the nape of her neck. When my hand returned, I left it poised at the open neck of her top.
When Davina’s arm dropped across my back, I realised my t-shirt had ridden up and her hand had settled on my bare skin. For a second I thought she would pull it away, but her warm fingers remained where they were.
Pressing the kiss the merest fraction more, I felt her fingers move across my back, up beneath my t-shirt, a tentative exploration.
I fiddled with her top button, not really trying to undo it, just making her aware of what I wanted. Her hand had reached the nape of my neck, forcing my t-shirt even further up. I took that as a sign that she wanted me to go further.
I hooked the first button of her top through its eye, then rested my palm upon her upper chest, just above the swell of her breasts. Davina made no response, but our kiss seemed to intensify. My fingers slowly spread out across her skin until I found the top of her bra. Now I traced a fingertip along the edge and up the other side, then back towards the centre. I felt the fingers of her other hand touch my thigh, then settle there.
Her second button slipped easily through its hole. I seized the moment, lowering my hand until it rested upon the rise of a breast. My lips parted and I allowed my tongue to trace hers. Gently, ever so gently, I squeezed her breast, and was relieved to feel fingers dig a little harder into my neck and a hand close in on my thigh.
I hooked a finger beneath the thin strap of Davina’s bra and eased it slowly from a shoulder, then let it slip down her arm. My hand edged back, pushing the material away, and then I had a soft, bare breast in the palm of my hand. I sensed, rather than heard, a low moan from deep in her throat, so I pressed a little more firmly.
Now I could feel the nipple stiffen beneath my fingers. When I broke our kiss, her eyes fluttered open and regarded me with a lusty curiosity.
“I love you,” I told her again.
She smiled and pulled my head down alongside hers, so I nuzzled her ear with wet little kisses.
“Bee,” she whispered. “I… I’m all right now. Please… love me.”
She groaned aloud when I took a nipple between my fingers and rolled it back and forth. My mouth plied little kisses down her neck, into the dip of her throat, then over the swell of her breasts. I reached a nipple and flicked it with my tongue before closing my lips and taking it into my mouth.
The fingers on my thigh gripped harder. I lifted my leg and slid it over hers, pulling her closer, her hand caught between us. I wondered if she could feel the heat of my pussy on her skin.
Her nipple was fully stiff now as I suckled it, and I could feel her breathing increase in tempo. I undid the rest of the buttons on her top until I could push it open. My hand slipped behind to unclasp her bra, then went back to her top to try and ease a sleeve down. She understood my intention and her arm came out from under my t-shirt. Her sleeve pulled free, and the garment dropped behind her on the grass.
Davina was pulling at the front of my t-shirt. I lifted my head from a breast and let her drag the top over my head. I was about to bend back down but she held me there, peering at my budding titties.
“Beautiful… Oh, Bee, you’re so beautiful.”
I watched as she edged closer to plant soft kisses upon my nipples, first one, then the other. She leaned back, and a hand found me, fingers brushing to and fro. “So stiff…” she murmured.
My own hand was trailing across her tummy. I reached the top of her shorts, but knew I’d struggle to get inside – they were far too tight. Instead, I ran my hand over them, brushing lightly across the material. I could feel the curve of her lips, and pushed a little harder. Her body responded with a small tremor and a sharp intake of breath.
I rubbed up and down the cleft through her shorts while our mouths met in another kiss. Her other hand settled between my legs, her thumb pressing against my pussy. As much as I hoped for it, though, she didn’t move her hand at all. I think she may have been fully focused on what I was doing to her.
I sensed Davina’s passion rising, and knew that just rubbing through her shorts wasn’t going to be enough. I took hold of the fastener and tried to undo it, but it was far too stiff and I couldn’t manage with one hand. Then her fingers were on mine, and between the two of us we managed to push it open. I pulled the zipper down and eased my hand inside her panties.
Her shorts were very tight, but eventually I felt her pussy lips beneath my touch. She gasped as I pressed into her, my fingers barely able to move. I slid them up a little until I found her clit. Her body instantly tightened, and when she held her breath I knew she was close to coming.
I’d barely noticed how or when she’d managed to get inside the leg of my shorts until I suddenly felt her touch my pussy lips. I ground my hips down and forced her hand between them. Then I was rocking back and forth, massaging my clit on her fingers.
I felt the tremors thrum through her body as she clawed at my neck and shook her head from side to side, breaking our kiss. “B-Beeeee!”
I wanted to come too, but Davina was too far gone to be aware of my needs at that moment. I humped her fingers, rocking my hips faster and faster. I had enough sense left to remind myself not to pee, as I often do when I come – it would most likely shock her, besides making a mess of both our shorts.
I squeezed my eyes tightly shut as I strove for a climax, vaguely aware that Davina’s fingers were now between my pussy lips. I just knew they were something to use. I pumped myself up and down, fucking her hand as hard as I could.
I could hear Davina speaking to me from far away. “Are you going to orgasm, Bee? Please… do it for me.”
I arched my back, going rigid as I dug my toes into the soft, cool grass. She was trying to help, her fingers moving against me, and all at once I could feel the pee coming.
I rolled back, pulling Davina with me, her hand still grinding against my pussy. I wished she’d touch my clit, but it was too late – I was coming anyway. The tremors rocked me and I felt the familiar hot jet inside my shorts.
Slowly I came back to myself. God, how I had needed that.
I opened my eyes when her lips touched mine in a soft caress. She was peering at me, and all I saw there was love. No shock, no regret – just love. She brought her head down alongside mine and kissed my neck. Her fingers were still inside me.
I heard her giggle and asked, “What’s funny?”
“I never believed I’d have my hand on a girl’s pussy. Now I don’t want to take it away.” She laughed again. “Did you know you’re soaking wet? I think you peed yourself.”
I felt myself blush a little. “Sorry, I do that sometimes when I come. I tried to control it, but… well, it just happens.”
Davina seemed amazed. “I made you come? I thought maybe I had but I wasn’t sure.” She paused for a moment before continuing with a smile, “I did make you come, didn’t l? Oh my God, it was so wonderful. Thank you, Bee.” Then she leaned in to kiss me again.
When she sat up, her breasts were free and bare, but she didn’t seem shy at all. She glanced down at my shorts, then her own. “Do you think we should take them off to dry them out?”
One of my dreams had come true today – I’d made this beautiful girl come. Now I’d get another: to see her naked. I lifted my hips to push my shorts down, but she stopped me.
“Let me.”
She gave them a tug, slipping the damp material down my legs and pulling them away to hang across a bush. When she peered back at me, her gaze travelled down to my panties. It was hard not to notice the gleam in her eyes. Her fingers hooked into the elastic and drew them down, the faintest hint of a grin teasing the corners of her mouth. She paused briefly when my pussy first came into view, her eyes flashing, then continued to tug them down.
When she looked up and saw that I was watching, her cheeks filled with colour. She turned away to hang my panties alongside my shorts.
“Now yours,” I said, reaching for her. She grabbed my hands, and I thought she was going to stop me, but when her hips lifted she helped me wiggle her shorts down. As small and tight as they were, her panties came down with them.
I threw Davina’s shorts aside without thinking, instead of hanging them out to dry, but on an impulse I brought her panties to my face. She put a hand to her mouth in shock as I breathed in deeply, taking in her wonderful aroma. I giggled and threw them back at her. She went to catch them but they landed on her head. Her eyes sparkled with mischief as she bunched them up in her hands and then dropped them on the grass.
“I think you’re a perv,” she laughed.
My eyes took in her naked beauty. God, she was divine – everything I could have wished for. I was already moving down between her legs as I replied, “You better believe it.”
Then my mouth was upon her lovely pussy lips.
Davina gave a little squeal of surprise, but made no attempt to stop me. “Bee! What’re you…” Then my tongue found her clit. “Oh! Oh my God!”
I gave her little nub a long, slow lick. Her legs opened wider and she pulled her feet up towards her body, leaving me framed between her knees.
After licking her pussy for a while I sat back on my haunches. “Well? Is it good?”
“Do it again…” she said in a hushed tone, then pulled my head back between her legs.
I didn’t need telling twice. But first I wanted to see inside those lovely little lips. My fingers spread her open. Her pee hole peeped out at me and the flesh deeper into her vagina glistened with sticky dew. I slipped two fingers through her folds, then slowly eased them inside.
Now that there were no tight shorts to hinder my exploration, I settled into a nice slow fuck. Davina gave a brief jolt when I returned my mouth to her clit, but I sucked more gently this time, aware of how sensitive she’d be after coming. She peered down at me, her top lip curled in a little snarl. I heard her swear for the first time. “Fuck, that’s good…”
I gathered up one of her legs with my free hand and brought it to rest across my shoulder. She did the same with her other leg. Any inhibitions she might’ve had were now long gone – she’d given herself to me completely.
I had access to her beautiful arse now, but had to remind myself to go cautiously. I couldn’t resist touching her there, though, and allowed my hand to trail its way across her thigh until I was cupping a cheek. I kneaded her there a while, inching slowly towards the centre where I briefly let my thumb graze her hole. She tensed at the contact, but I’d already moved on.
Davina’s body seemed to be coiling tighter, her passion rising, so I fucked her pussy a little faster, probing different points to see where I might get a reaction. Her vaginal walls clamped down over my fingers, and I knew I’d found a particularly sensitive spot. Her hips thrust forwards, urging me on as I tickled her there.
The trembling throughout her body was a clear sign that she was ready to come again. I trailed a finger through the crack of her arse, then spun the tip in little circles over the rosebud, all the while still fucking her pussy.
Her thighs gripped my neck tightly, and I could feel the spasm of her pussy clutching and releasing, clutching; releasing. When she let out a long, low moan of desperate pleasure, it was clear she was in the throes of climax, so I slipped a finger into her arse, knowing she was in no state to protest, even if she’d wanted to. I took her clit into my mouth and sucked hard until she lost control, wailing incoherently. Somehow I managed to keep hold of her as she thrashed against me, driving her orgasm on and on.
There was one last surge before she collapsed, spent, lying limp beneath me. I was worn out too, my energy sapped by Davina’s violent struggles. I lay my head upon her tummy, my finger still buried inside her pussy.
I could feel her stroking my hair. “Bee, come here. Let me hold you,” she murmured.
I slipped out of her, then crawled up into her waiting arms. They wrapped around me and pulled me close, and then we were lying quietly together – the silence of lovers wholly content in their embrace.
Finally, she spoke. “Bee, I never knew… So beautiful. I’m so happy.”
“I know, my love.” I kissed her softly, then sat up. “We ought to go, it’s getting late.”
“But I want to try and love you, just like you did to me. Let’s stay a while longer.”
“We have tomorrow,” I told her with a smile. “Tomorrow you can love me. Let’s go.”
I managed to row the boat back across the lake (not too badly for my first time, I didn’t think), and this time it was Davina’s turn to stare, even though my shorts weren’t quite as revealing as hers.
“I think you’re a bad influence on me,” she told me with a little smirk. “I never would’ve imagined wanting to look between another girl’s legs before you came along.”
A short while later we were lingering on the path to Davina’s treehouse, clinging together in a passionate kiss. Finally we parted, said our goodbyes, then headed our separate ways.
“Davina!” I called after her. “Will you wear a dress or a skirt for me tomorrow?”
She laughed at that, then gave me a wave before disappearing from sight.
Tomorrow seems such a long way off, I thought as I made my way home. I smiled to myself as I remembered the first time I’d discovered this secret place. I came to look for berries, but found a mysterious treehouse and a beautiful girlfriend as well.
Thank God for blackberries!
The End
Beautiful. The setting strongly evokes a stand-alone chapter in Letoria’s Karen and Laci novel, but without the terribly sad ending. Also very glad that the girls find each other without being pushed by adults. A true winner for true love.
Dear Kinkychic
This is quite the lovely story which includes some very hot 🔥🥵 adolescent love making (definitely too much heartfelt passion to just be sex!), starting with Bee and it seems to be beginning in Davina as she is coming to accept the beautiful feelings she never expected to feel from/for another female.
While the ages for both Bee and Davina are not specifically given, my feeling from the story is maybe from 13-15 years old? While many of the stories here may have one character in that age range, it is rare that both the main characters are in that range. I want to thank you for choosing to have them both in that range. The dialogue is spot on for adolescents, making it very believable and seamless.
I’m 100 percent positive that just about everyone who reads this excellent love story feels as I do…multiple chapters are needed to let us enjoy the adventure in how the love blossoms between these two beautiful young souls. So many possibilities to expand to other female family, friends, showing how young love 💗 survives the adolescent trials and tribulations that seam to be part of today’s life experience.
I don’t know if this a new story you wrote or perhaps already existed just not seen here before, regardless, it is excellent and I hope you will feel encouraged to continue to spoil us with your master-class talent. I really felt fully immersed in the word picture you painted. Just want more of the this!
Thanks again for the wonderful playground that is your imagination,
Michael
I believe it’s stated that Bee is 13. Anyway we actually enjoyed the first half of the story even more then the second half with the love making.
Though we very much enjoyed the second half also, don’t get us wrong. A first time experience, two girls one a little older than the other, and in that first love of young friends.
It was told beautifully. And if giving us warm feelings while also giving us a great orgasm was your purpose, you succeeded perfectly.
Those are such lovely comments guys. It really does make the effort and my editing over and over (subsequently re-edited by BlueJean – so many thanks), worthwhile.
Incidentally, the location is exactly as described and my sister, Bee, did pick berries there for several years. Eventually, she ran into a groundsman and was warned away. She’s never found anywhere with as many brambles since. Nor has she found a Davina.
Great story. But not to be picky but I believe “bridal way” should be Bridleway.
You’re right, that one slipped through the net. Thanks.
Lovely romantic story Kinkychic. And I can really understand how the location is real – it it certainly beautifully described. Similar to many of my own trips to find brambles, but sadly without the love that blossomed in yours, just prickled and purple blackberry juice stained fingers!!!
Thanks as always, your writing is always very special to read.
I love this story… it is beautifully written and the sensual intimacy is so well described… thanks for sharing it xxx
I really enjoyed the simplicity and the intimacy of this one.
While I enjoy stories like latchmore and ripples, they’ve become so busy with characters, where this one has two characters and a patch of grass. Wonderful
What a lovely story!
As others have said, it’s refreshing to find a story that doesn’t feature any adults for a change. Just normal, healthy teenage desire here. It was a pleasure to edit.
So if you ever find panties hanging on blackberry bushes when you’re next out walking…
I’m a word – Idyllic. Love and nature are a potent combination. The author framed and captured the special moment(s) perfectly. Really lovely and erotic. Thanks so much kinkychic and BlueJean. That really made my day. ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
great story and reminds me of my young days in England picking blackberries
What a beautiful story!! How delightful to find such naughty pleasure, so sensual and exciting. Thank you Kinky xx
Such a nice treat. It’s clear that this story was honed through skilful editing and rewrites. Very little is superfluous and the depth of characters and naturally feeling progression of a relationship feels real and honest.
I have to say I love that they’d known each other a month before finding deeper moments and connections with one another. Please keep writing and I would love to see where these characters go from here, but even if it’s just a one-off it was a fine tale and worth the read.
What an sweet story Kinkyhic, two young girls meeting innocently and the younger can’t hold back her feelings for new friend. They kiss, they explore and share a very intimate moment. I loved it!
Absolutely the best short story I’ve read in a long time it’s a shame it’s a short story and not a ful blown multi chapter story
Delightful story…the imagery is superb, I felt like I was sat by the lake watching each scene develop.
Thank you
Jules
So many lovely comments, too many to answer individually, suffice to say… thank you one and all.
Such a delightful story. Beautifully written
Cute story and fun teenage romance, with some pretty hot sex to boot (well, mostly… not a fan of the pee stuff, but it wasn’t a big focus so it’s fine). I would have liked maybe just a little more detail about Bee’s growing feelings for Davina before that day at the island. I know the narration says that a month has passed, so it makes sense that they’ve grown closer, but still, for the reader, it goes from first meeting to “I love you” within a couple pages so it feels a bit sudden. Perhaps just a few paragraph showing us how Bee gets more and more attached to her new friend over that month would have helped.
Anyway, fun little tale. Nice work.
Thanks for the kind comment.
As for the “I love you”, I actually think it’s quite typical of young teens, even more so these days.
A truly “great” love story of love and adoration between these 2 adorable girls! “WOW”, the introduction of the two was masterfully written and played out so perfect, just like a beautiful scene of love. The title of this story is very appropriate and delightful. Hope there are many more chapters that will show how they each, continue their lust and love for each other, at such tender times. Well done!
What a beautiful story. So tender and sweet.
My goodness, almost a year since anyone commented on this story.
Thanks for the kind comments Elab and 3FingersNeat. This has always been one of my favourites.
Kinkychic, this story resembles a flashback chapter in Karen and Laci, where two 12-year-old best friends love to go on nature hikes behind their homes or at a camp, in both cases in Maine. The setting is almost the same, although berry picking isn’t part of Letoria’s story. I wanted you to know, since K&L is so wonderful and so is your story.
I have found and bookmarked although chapter one is missing.
Kinkychic, if you want, I can send K&L to you myself, directly or via JetBoy.